Sleeping Valor

Yes, it is. There's some plot, but it's mostly character relaitonships, with added elements of someone trying to kill them off every now and again (vampires!! XD). I loved it, ...

“What are you doing up?” Charlotte grumbled. She was sipping from a glass of water and there were tears stains down her tanned cheeks. Where is Charlotte in the kitchen? ...

*dies and goes to heaven with a smile when she sees the amazing crits she's got* Hope this critique helped. :D Amazingly helpful. Thanks so much for reading this! XD ...

=P Not rhyme, rhythm. The beat. =P In my head it follows a beat, almost like a song. So I notice when one of the lines doesn't fit into the ...

You could, but if it's kind of long and not really related (in the sense that it's a new scene separate from this one) then a new thread will do. ...

Flashbacks! XD I wrote a whole story about a character who can only remember things through flasbacks. I think her name was Zeela. ^_^ No plot, of course. btw. Is ...

^_^ Thanks Woz. I don't think the first paragraph is in any danger. I like it just the way it is, though the very last line might need rephrasing (due ...

Thanks Woz! Thanks Jabber! lol. Looks like I'll have to think about working in some details on the doctor scene. I don't want to add them at the beginning for ...

:D Look! It's only been up a day and I have a bunch of new readers! One is even a fan! *little happy dance* chocoholic, I'm glad you found some ...

XD Sorry! No chapter one. My plans for this (I have a plot even) got sidetracked when the Spider Venom sci-fi story came to me. Which was then sidetracked by ...

:D Yay! You daydream third person too. =P Crazy amusing stuff. XD Sadly, this story got hit by the idea train, and was replaced by my sci-fi story, which was ...

It is a knock-out clever sentence, but it is also incredibly hard to read. In fact, the entire second paragraph is a little bit of a challenge. :D Clever? So ...

Mwaha. I have another reader. :D Yes, I know. The little intro with the kid was actually very munch in old style, which was to introduce elements in a slow ...

*gasp* Look! Someone made changes. ^_^ The small girl of 13 locked her diary and jogged downstairs, pulling out the hair tie that w a s keeping her chestnut brown ...

George is the best. Jon's charm ran out after a while, especially when he started getting all moody. Though I liked Liam too, most of the time. =P